The Tuesday Birthday Poem Conundrum

This is the week I am supposed to add my piece to the Tuesday Birthday Communal Poem - a jazzy number in self contained stanzas:

So comments anyone? - will almost certainly decide something completely different and post the minute I get out of school - hopefully before 4 - in the meantime - why not check out all the other verses that this is riffing off - :) here at the 3rd-birthday-communal-jazz-poem I think I already said that....

(PLEASE NOTE THE ACTUAL POEM IS NOW IN - and is neither of the poems below - I think it's much better and its here - the 12th stanza - at the 3rd-birthday-communal-jazz-poem)

12

Breathe, Lily, the air is rising

the yarn is fresh

the night is young

for hunting

12.

Breathe, Lily, the air is rising

the meter fresh out of notes

so easily plucked -

for this night

we go hunting

cheers,
A.J.

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